• LesserAbe@lemmy.world
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    3 months ago

    The prison system must be reformed.

    That said, I’m here to nitpick about format: Stitching aside, in my opinion most “roses are red” memes are not clever/effective.

    The first two lines should be related - the original children’s rhyme is two flowers followed by two colors. Here we have a flower and color followed by a food and a flavor.

    Then the last two lines don’t have any relation to the first two. Just, well these rhyme so we’ll put them next to each other.

    In the original poem it’s something like,

    Roses are red, Violets are blue, Sugar is sweet And so are you

    The third line does mention flavor so kudos to this creator for at least tying that in. That said, I think what makes the original poem effective is it’s a sort of matter of fact inventory about the known qualities of the world, and all things which are related (in this case I guess “girly”/feminine things). Well, we know this flower is this color and that flower is that, and we all know sugar is sweet, and of course we all know you are too.

    So if we wanted to use all that to inform a poem about how fucked our justice system is, how about something like,

    Blood cells are red, Bruises are blue, Ancient egypt had slaves U.S. prisons do too

    Could use some work and maybe not zany enough for crossstitching, but I hope that shows what I mean.

    The first two lines are matter of fact statements about bodily function and colors that also mirror the original lines of the poem in terms of last word. The third line is a matter of fact statement no one would object to about a related subject and the last line while keeping the original rhyme introduces another matter of fact statement which is perhaps less universally agreed on (I think you’re sweet too!) but is actually the main reason the poem is being recited.

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      3 months ago

      it’s Beautiful

      Blood cells are red, Bruises are blue, Ancient egypt had slaves U.S. prisons do too